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DepthPerception1 (August 21, 2008 at 6:32 pm)
Not hating, just giving honest feedback. This poem has potential. However,there's no dressing up the truth. If your words were cohesive and rang true, you wouldn't need the theatrics. Being a poet is something you are, live, breathe, not a show. This may fly as poetry on MTV, but at a slam or Def jam venue, this will hardly compare to the other talented poets like Shihan, In-Q, Sekou (tha Misfit), Javon Johnson, etc. etc. Think about what message you're trying to send, and let your words evolve.
nishasanok (August 21, 2008 at 6:23 pm)
Wow,you make all real poets look like idiots. You dont even make sense, good job trying to look the part.*and whats with the candle? All for show? Turn on a fuckin lamp.
GoodTimesWade (August 19, 2008 at 2:26 am)
haha look up unforgiveable , he reminds me of it
lyrikkalvision07 (August 11, 2008 at 3:27 am)
Dude what the heck is wrong with you....try again
Ginasong (June 27, 2008 at 2:20 pm)
I think you have an interesting idea but like some others say here, it does need to be made plainer. Many of your words are hard to understand. I heard some good stuff though but I don't believe the message if you are saying that we are gods too. Although, it is ironic to me that someone once wrote a song about "What if God was one of us?" when the truth of the matter is: He actually had been and they didn't know it.
curlmebella (June 12, 2008 at 2:37 am)
"This is the destiny of all of Gods Gods as long as your heart is true."-Love it!Good poem
aaliyab (May 8, 2008 at 5:26 am)
he is too busy trying to portray an image. Blow out the candle and speak with clarity... Your message isn't clear!
TokyoPartyDragon (May 5, 2008 at 4:29 am)
This is the creepiest basically semi-pornographic, poor excuse for spoken word , rambling non-sense on here. This is like those infrared camera shots they have of reality show hormone monsters hooking up. search something by Shihan, Saul Williams etc if you want real spoken word.
666coreytailor (March 27, 2008 at 1:51 pm)
never saw such a shitty video in my whole life,respect
32oz (March 8, 2008 at 12:37 am)
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